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I grew up in three days. And from
the very moment when I opened my eyes for the first time and saw the bottom of
my pea pod swaying slightly in reaction to my fall, I knew that this place was different
than where I had been before. Before I only knew colors, and the movement of
shadows, muffled sounds, the vibrations from the outside of my pod, things that
I experienced through a veil, something that I thought I would never get to
experience firsthand. But here I was. Finally, here I was laying on the ground,
skin to grass, the wind scraping over my shoulders, these weird bumps forming
on my arms, my legs, the back of my neck. I grew up in three days. Laying there
on the floor beneath my pod, feeling the earth on my skin, I grew up. My body
changed shape, grew bigger, grew longer, and yet I did not move. It did not
seem like moving was necessary for growth.
But once I was fully grown, I knew
I had to move from my spot, move away from the little place of the Earth that I
had made my own. And once I was grown, I pushed myself up and moved my legs in
the first direction I saw. I walked until I saw others, others who were like
me, who had too come from pods hanging from trees. The first man I came to told
me that the first man who had fallen from a pod had become friends with a man who
wore the skin of a raven. And this man had given us all the things before us
now. He had given us the trees, and the hills, the rivers, and the animals. He
had given us everything in this world that we could see.
“Look around, brother. Look around
and see our inheritance.”
And so I left the village of pod
men. Moved my legs and kept moving even through the changing of the skies,
through the cycling of the darkness and the light that chased it away, moved
until I came to a place where there was nothing else around me. The Earth now
had an edge and I was standing on it, looking past it into the everlasting sky
that stretched before me. The light was so bright it burned my eyes, and as I
turned back I was startled by a voice.
“Welcome changeling. Have you come
to see the world, little one?”
And all I saw were black feathers
and a beak that was pushed up and off, light a hood. And then a smile.
Author’s Note:
This week I chose to model my story off of the Alaskan
regional anthology, The Raven Myth: Raven’s Creations. A large majority of the
stories from this unit mentioned this godlike creature called The Raven that
could shed his skin and become a man. The humans were born from pea pods from
the trees he made and when he met the first one, he provided it with everything
it could need to survive in this world. But he began to get worried that the
humans would kill all of his creations as their numbers grew, and this is kind
of the part of the story that I wanted to focus on. I wanted to tell a story
where The Raven is not quite as nice as he seems to be at the very beginning of
his stories involving the humans. Not everything is as cut and dry as it is in
stories sometimes, and I wanted to show a perspective where the Raven was not
so forgiving or understanding and instead chose to deal with these humans in a
more sinister way. (In case you were curious, yes, I am watching a horror movie
as I write this.)
Wow! I had way too much going on to write a story this week, but you did an amazing job! I haven't read this unit, but it kind of makes me want to read it next week. I like how you made the Raven a little sinister, but in a subtle way. People could interpret the end of the story in different ways, which is something that I really like about cliffhangers!
ReplyDeleteI only saw one thing that I wanted to mention. In the next to last sentence, you wrote "light a hood." I wasn't sure if maybe this was supposed to be like or if you did it on purpose, but I figured I would mention it! Great job!
What an incredible story! All the details made this story so good. At first I wasn't sure if it were a human or a flower of some sort but then I got it figured it out. There aren't a lot of words and yet it was right to the point. I struggle with this and envy you. Fantastic job!
ReplyDeleteHi Amanda! That was a really good story. I like that the identity of the character was kind of hidden until the end. I kept guessing what it was before I got to the end. I thought it was a pea lol because of the pods. I did like that we get to see what was going through the raven's mind as it goes through the process of "being born." Good job!
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